superjill (superjill) wrote,
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Crowdsourcing my songwriting

I need help with one of my lines!

Ukulele Rebel

If I were a smarter woman,
I'd be studying right now,
But instead
I'm writing
This song

If I were more responsible
My nose would be in a book
But instead
I'm writing
This song

(Chorus)

I know there are more
important things to do
than strum away
the afternoon
But face it
If this is the worst thing I do
--> this line <-- *
I'm just writing
I'm writing
This song

My worst vice
Is the ukulele
This is the worst thing I do
Whoah
Watch me I'm a rebel
Whoah Whoah
Watch me
I'm writing
This song
Ukulele Rebel (Repeat from My worst vice)

(Verse 2)

If I were a domestic woman,
I'd be cleaning right now,
But instead
I'm writing
This song

If I were more sensible
My grocery shopping would be done
But instead
I'm writing
This song

(Chorus)





* What I want it to mean is: "I don't really feel like I'm being a naughty/bad/uncontrollable person"

What I've come up with so far is:

I don't really feel like I'm being unsubdued
I don't really deserve the bad-mouthing you spew
I don't really feel I'm reprehensible or rude
I don't really feel like I'm being wild or rude


Help please?
Tags: songwriting, ukulele comedienne, ukulele madness
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